I'm going to continue on my story - Adriannus

[Guest Adriannus]

Hellbent, thanks for the right words, in the right order, at the right time. I'm going to get going and clean up my first story and continue to post bits and pieces of it as I continue, so keep your eyes peeled for its continuation.

[Hellbent]

You already got all the input you need.... Why are you trying to milk us for more input? Did you read my replies to your post? I don't think you're going to get anymore input.... And I don't see why you need more input.
Again, read my replies to your original post.

Actually, I will add this bit of input: Clean up what you've already written and continue from there if you are not up to the task of doing my other suggestion. There were some parts that could use some tidying up. Some words you used: "was angry, and even on the verge of irritated" or something like that. You got that backward. Irritated comes before angry. There were some other parts that could be revised as well.

[Guest Adriannus]

You're right. There are errors that suck massively. I wrote it a bit too quick and failed to proofread it. I'll have to fix it up and continue on w/the story.

[Hellbent]

Good, I'm glad you are aware of these errors. I look forward to rereading it all nice and palatable.

[nightmare imp]

Cool,keep up the good work!

[Guest Adriannus]

Thanks, nightmare imp -- will do.